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Redemption. by ~Max-F1:iconMax-F1:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word




Another world,
Another place,
A happy loving warm embrace,
Where light is bright,
And so are you,
Paper thin,
White shining through.
Intangible,
As love could be,
Throwing me into the sea,
Into the dream,
Out of the dark,
Where ghostly bullets leave their mark.
Keep me out,
And keep me in,
Floating through the sparkling wind.

The path you choose lies below,
Far beneath the undertow,
Of currents in a fiery dance,
Of friendship, hate, and true romance.

So spiral to the depths of you,
Mangling what isn’t true,
Fall into those loving arms,


And Explode.
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Author's Comments

For the benefit of Mr. Kite: There will be a show tonight (on trampolines).


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~takusan-no-ai Jul 9, 2008, 10:46:59 PM
Oh, very nice :) I knew the "And Explode" at the end sounded familiar, as did most of the poem :D

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~Max-F1 Jul 9, 2008, 10:50:12 PM
?


I wrote the rest of it...



and :iconthnxplz:

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~takusan-no-ai Jul 10, 2008, 1:24:30 AM
Hm? Oh, I meant that when I read it (in class), I thought that it was part of the song, because of the rhythm of how I read it. Sorry, wasn't too clear on that =P

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~Max-F1 Jul 10, 2008, 1:36:37 AM
oh sorry ^^;

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~takusan-no-ai Jul 10, 2008, 2:57:47 AM
Its ok :) I'm just not too clear sometimes ^^"

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~Angel-Wing101 Jul 10, 2008, 8:04:46 AM
thanx man, yeah that last part was unexpected but it added character.

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"to dream or not to dream, that is the question."

~degozako ne? moi ichido!!
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~Max-F1 Jul 10, 2008, 6:29:38 PM
I thought it would...

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~SinLuver Jul 12, 2008, 2:02:07 AM
ur poems always sounds to magical
i expect some crazy powerful witch to pop out of my screen

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~Max-F1 Jul 12, 2008, 12:56:30 PM
bwahahaha I am the wicked witch of ur mom!!!!

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